Captain Susan Lochley is infected with nano parasites while on a mission to capture the evil scientist Dr. Amanda Cartledge. Cartledge uses the nanos to hypersexualize and control the captain, forcing her to race against time to disable them before they ruin her mind and body.
No changes. Still recommended.
Still enjoying this story, but the incomplete paths so far lock you on one of the worst CYOA routes from what I can tell. Still keen to read more.
I quite enjoyed it. The writing is solid and descriptive, despite the spelling errors that appear here and there, which is setting the scene well. It is also an interesting start to the character development of the lead depending on how much you choose to resist or comply.
Layout and choices are so far not a very good indication of a deep branching storyline of CYOA choices, but when I was looking at the code and stat tracking it does look promising.
Cautiously recommended for a beta as it is still early days. But I am keen to read more.
I'm adoring this game so far! The writing is very descriptive, and in the best way -- I find it incredibly arousing in a very intense way. That said, I feel like there are only really two distinct routes right now. I don't have an issue with that, though, because I honestly can't get enough of it. Captain Lochley has inspired me to make a couple characters, too.
I do not need pictures it is so well writen. Keep it up.
Just to reply generally to some of the comments...
I do intend to add pictures, but only after the game is mostly complete. The choices in the game will set you on different paths in the story, opening or closing some options, but their bigest impact will probably be felt in the games endings.
Id like to voice my dissent, add pics if you want, but its much more important to maintain your quality in writing and progress. If you do decide to add pics, probably start small with profile pics for susan or something. Looking for pics fitting scenes could be a nice break from the writing etc, but it can also disrupt progress.... Great start so far I havent felt that significant an impact from most choices but its early enough that it could actually be a good sign (always good win things have long term slow impacts).