Hi, I'm Crushstation, and I'd love your feedback on my first TWINE game, Female Agent!
It's in early development but currently has 140,322 words and 581 hand-drawn body and clothing artworks.
UPDATE 30 MAR 2018: Fixed broken avatar images.
"Just wanted to say this game really stands out to me. Extremely well-written, just the right amount of customization to make your character unique without spending half an hour setting it up (which encourages multiple playthroughs), simple but very nice artwork, great setting, ... I usually don't even like text-based games, but this one hits all the right notes for me."
"Funny, arousing, original and descriptive without being wordy. I would say the most entertaining game I've played on this website - looking forward to more content. I generally like games with a lot of images, but honestly I barely noticed as the writing was succinct and enjoyable, and the avatar system is actually really good (interactive)."
"Definitely one of the best Twine based games out there. The game is still in early development, but shows a lot of promise as far as plot, art and game design goes. The content that's already there is superb."
"I love this game! There is a surprising amount of content for such an early release and the writing is fantastic. The avatar system works well and looks realistic. The pictures that are already in place fit really well with what is going on in the story. Just a really great job and I can't wait to see more."
"The game had me, the minute I realized you can make her Canadian."
Female Agent is the story of a Western intelligence officer sent undercover into Bangkok's red light district. There she has to strip, suck and fuck her way towards catching a dangerous international terrorist.
Because you can only play the prologue so far I would not call this a beta. The story was entertaining for as far as it went though. There were still flags that indicated points where the creator intends to improve certain parts of the story. I would like to see more.
Good game so far, but only the prolog is playable, linear but with a good amount of options to choose from on a regular basis.
I liked the options given, also I don't know what happens if you play a little more prudish ;)
Overall the game still needs lots of work, the sex scenes are rather simple and since they are reoccuring regularly that might be a good point for improvement.
So, first off.... great work on the writing, it realy gets you into the story. Also liked how traits you earn can alter paths to take, and how apparently your nationality is used aswell (like the scottish bar patrons being rather provocative towards brittish agents).
The art is not abundant, but realy good. Looking at the characters avatar i can say that for me personaly she has the right curves and looks, maybe a bit more custom hair and colours...including maybe non caucasion (aldo i understand that might require rewriting some parts)
The part where some improvement might lie though, are the short sex scenes. There isnt alot of text or reactions writen, and they end pretty fast. Now you dont need Fenoxo CoC lenght scenes (that would be overkill) but dragging it out a bit and adding a bit more description to the scenes would make them better in my opinion. Non the less this is your game, so if you disagree, then by all right ignore this and do your own thing :D
Overall this ranks highly on the scale of best games here on TFGames, 8/10 from me.
Good luck in the future!
At the moment this is a well-crafted introduction to a game. What exists, though, is very good indeed.
Looking at the past changelogs elsewhere on the net, the developer has been iterating: introducing missions, creating and polishing an engine to serve as some portion of the basis of the ultimate engine for the game loop in Bangkok. This is sound and sensible, and some of the best games on this site have done some very good iterative polish. (from Accidental Woman (code refactoring) to No Money Down Blues (rewriting).
This does leave one with a degree of impatience (even having just discovered the game) on actually getting to Bangkok and getting into the game loop. That said, as others have noted elsewhere, if this core of the game isn't done properly, the game will be severely weakened.
I have to join the list of people cheering for the inclusion of Canada and being able to play a Canadian agent. No doubt Aussies and Kiwis feel the same way. I do encourage the developer to add in a mention of CFS Leitrim, Canada's oldest SIGINT station, at some point for flavour. (Pacem Petere).
The game features a surprisingly well-integrated sidebar avatar that offers important clues to what's happening (I'd totally missed these playing it on a mobile phone) in certain scenes. The writing is good, though I see holes opening up that I hope the developer's thought of. Since I don't want to insert spoilers in a review, I'll post on the board about this.
I do enjoy the developer's "Write better flavour text". Yes, some polish is required there. Not to worry.
I enjoyed the character creation stage. I'm not sure if it's quite enough data (it focuses primarily on physical and mental and very little on personality other than a single sexual trait). The IQ range offered was surprisingly broad, but just plausible. Someone at the high end would have to be unusally good at reading people and (perhaps) adjusting her behaviour. I hope the university degree selection will potentially have a small impact, positive or negative.
What to dislike? The hypnosis puts one too much on rails. Without going into excessive details, one has no choice at several points. Constraining choice is useful for a signallying purpose, but the character should be able to resist to at least some degree. I speak as one who liked the introduction of hypnosis, but if it's just used as a deus ex machina to force someone down a path, that's really pretty bad.
There's no real choice in garments at this point. I hope that changes, even if only for roleplaying purposes.
Overall this was an excellent game introduction and I look forward to more.
This game feels really similar to another game I've played before, but I can't put my finger on it... Still great game, and worth a look!