The game is set in an Alice in Wonderland based world and follows the adventures of Alex on his journey down the rabbit hole. Why he is there he doesn't know but will soon find out there are all kinds of surprises waiting for him. The game includes multiple transformations including mtf, ftf, animal and mind control.
The game is still in it's very early stages but I found it nevertheless quite enjoyable. Well, without rushing through the dialogues you still get roughly 1 hour playtime, so it's probably more then a lot of other games on this site. Speaking of the dialogues: The grammar and spelling are just fine. There are a few errors, but nothing that would disturb the flow of reading. At best I would point out that the author sometimes forgot the "h" in "Cheshire".
Out of Alice's 3 party members so far I liked The Hatter the most. Just my type of crazy guy. Since the story is (obviously) loosely based on Alice' Adventures in Wonderland I'm curious if there will be any more characters to join Alice's quest.
For some reason I felt reminded of some thing I read the first book of "Otherland", but it's so long ago that I can't quite remember what it was about. Whatever, it would be really interesting if this game would turn out as something like an adult version of Alice's Adventures.
I already saw this in other RPG-Maker games, so I recommend some type of "friendship-points" (for the lack of a better word) system for Cheshire, The Hatter and Nivens, since they all seem to be interested in our lovely heroine. So the players themself can decide with whom they want to build a relationship with or if they even want to, that is.
The outburst of Alex/Alice at the end of the current version was well written. Even though he seems to accept the circumstances and is willing to save the land, I hope that we will see him still struggling with adapting to his new form; I mean, who wouldn't? So far there wasn't any freedom or choices at all, so it would be nice if in future updates we could have some influence in how well/fast Alex is adapting to his new form as Alice.
The only thing I would criticize is the bunny whorehouse part. Is it really necessary for the plot or character development that the main character, who was a guy only one day ago, is being raped and mindcontrolled for what could be weeks at best and months at worst? I have no problem with non consensual sex in an adult game but I got the impression that this part just served to have some sex scenes at all in the game; and mayhap to add some drama at the end of the current version (not that it was needed). Why not letting Cheshire rescue her, after she was forced to give a blow- and boob job? This would still be terrifying enough as an negative experience, without the whole trauma anyone would suffer from in this situation. And instead you could add more detail to Alice's wet dream about making out with Cheshire.
Well, that's just my opinion. As it is now I think that part overdid it and Alice is much too calm with it. Rape as it is can be traumatizing enough, but in his/her case it so much worse and should be addressed properly.
That's all I can think of for now. I hope this project is still alive. Overall good job so far.
Promising, but not quite to my taste. It's only an alpha, so I hope some attention to game balance and text proofreading will happen along the way. ( there / their / they're etc.)
good game cant wait for more to happen but very good for an alpha so far