You are a new adventurer about to enter your first dungeon.
Hi, long time lurker here. I'm sorry for how short the game is and for my english I'm not a native english speaker. Only the first day and the first sex scene are written. I post it now to see if anyone is interested and to get some early feedback. This is early game concept, everything is very barebone, don't expect a lot out of it.
I think it would make sense to give my roadmap for the game so everyone know what to expect for each release.
Concept status: First draft, writting the entire game in minimum detail and lay down the entire game mechanic.
Alpha status: Coding, I'm going to replace all pen and paper marking for actual coding.
Beta status: Fluff, I'm going to add a lot of text and detail everywhere and an actual intro.
Complete: When it's complete duh.
(Bear with me here. I'm going to give an honest opinion along with a little constructive criticism here.)
What we seem to have here is a very ambitious idea, without the technical knowhow to back it up.
This is basically intended as a Fantasy RPG put to a choose your own adventure style format. You start out the game with a list of gear and skills to choose from, then jump straight into the action as you start your adventure.
The writing is a little abrupt but clear enough to read. The author would do well to go back through what is already there and expand on it a little bit. It would also be nice to see an introduction to the story before character creation to give players a better understanding of the setting. I for one would like to know something about the world the game takes place in, what sets it apart? Who hired you to come here? What are they like? What are the legends/rumors associated with this idol? There are also a host of spelling errors ("rabit dog" should be "rabid dog" I think.) that the writer should address. Spell check is your friend, and you would do yourself a favor to go back and read what you have written, you'd likely catch some of the discrepancies that way. The writing is ok, but not great, the author could go back and expand on a lot of what is already there. We can't see the dungeon as there are no pictures in the game (I personally like scenes to be described in enough detail that there is no need for pictures), we dont know if its damp or dry. A large cave, a small one, an ancient ruin buried by the passage of time, or something else entirely. Paint a picture with your words.
This is the biggest complaint I have. The author should take the time to learn how to code item selection into the game (Even if they want a cheat menu that would allow the taking of additional items/skills.) to make play easier for players. (Who wants to sit down with a pen and paper to write down their skills/gear every time they plan to play something?) If you aren't sure how to do this, ask over in the help forum, we have a lot of really great people around here who will be happy to help. Single biggest killer for me was the character creation.
I think the game has some potential if the writer takes the time to code item selection into the game and goes back to expand upon what is already there story wise. I'll be sure to check back in a couple of builds from now to see how things have progressed.
Ok idea, but not a lot positive to be said. Coding is all messed up. Writing is mediocre. The few sex scenes I found were laughable. I'll play future updates but this one is pretty meh.