Played many a game on this site and other sites and always felt it was missing something or they were too short. So I decided to try to make one myself. OOPS It is not that easy :) So this is my first game (ever) in Twine.
It is not a finished game, so expect some empty passages and possibly some bugs here or there.
Basically I'm uploading to see if this is something people like, or hate, or whatever. So please let me know.
A game centered around a young girl Lizzy who ran away from home as she did not want to make a choice between her mum and dad when they decided to split up.
She ended up in Amsterdam, a city with a lot of opportunites, but not per se for a young girl.
It is up to you to guide her through all the influences of the city and stop the corruption of a young girl.... or not :)
It is a large file with many .webm files in it and some .jpg files.
This is currently version 7.0 - I just call it that way to keep track of development really - and I am working on version 8 which will have more events, improvements, more gifs etc.
03/01/2016 - V 0.7.2 Small update again to get rid of some small bugs and dead ends. Download this HTML version and the Data pack of V7.
Game is updated; 21/12/2016 with Version 7.0. There were several issues getting this version up. The biggest delay was due to my USB crashing which set me back in time a lot. Was able to recover quite a bit of data, but all vidfiles had gotten a new name from teh recovery tool. I also lost quite a bit of work on the phonesystem. So in order to get it out before Xmas I had to kill it. Still think the update is quite big though.
Hopefully I got all the gamebreaking bugs - there were many after the crash I can tell you - but only one person testing never... well you know.
There are 2 files now:
1 - The html file, made seperately to be able to quickly address bugs
2 - the Data file.
The html file goes on top of the Amsterdam folder - not in it!
Really Appreciate the replies so far; Please checck the forum section, the Walkthrough section and the ingame Hints section for any questions. A lot of the questions in the reviews below have already been answered; Makeup can be bought from the Mall, not the general store.
Thanks again for all the feedback so far.
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You've lived all your life in a small village adjacent to The Lake District. You never realy been to a big city as mum and dad told you Liverpool and Manchester were full of dangers.
But a week after you turned 17 you're parents got divorced and you were forced to choose who to live with. There was no right or wrong choice, still whatever choice you wanted to make felt wrong, as if you were cheating on the other parent.
So that is the start and Lizzy ends up in Amsterdam. Will she be able to not fall into the dangerous downward spiral of drugs, sex, prostitution and the like? It is up to you.
You, the player who is trying to kee afloat in the beautiful city of Amsterdam.
Many others, of whom some will try to help you, but most will try to gain something, which usually is money and they need a tool for that.
- Makeup can only be bought from ICI Paris at the mall, Lipstick and Nailpolish can eb bought from the general store as well as ICI Paris.
- Please visit the forums (Link at the left side) as most of the questions you may have will have been answered (likely already several times :)).
- Not all items have a function yet. Check out the ingame hints section for info on most items.
- Morale is the main driver for your pay in each job. the better your morale, the higher your pay. For most jobs addiction is a negative multiplier, meaining it reduces your pay.. for most jobs.
Not really a walkthrough but a list of locations to go to so far and key features :
- Home (duh)
- Beach (90% implemented)
- Mall (75% implemented)
- Club (party time - 85%-ish implemented)
- Spa health resort (can only get rid of addictions here atm; 10%)
- Jobs: Model - 100% done, Librarian 80%, Flowershop 25%, 1 more job available in next version Cleaning
- Park - 95% done
- Town - all events done I believe but needs polishing so 85%
- Park 'work' 90%
- Glory holes can now be found in most toilets (95% done)
- 1 more job!
- Street 'work'
- booths in club
- Dancing Queen
- more cities
This is a very fleshed-out game with a lot of good stuff in it:
-Huge amount of content & gifs
-The corruption is handled very well, and there's a lot of different ways to get corrupted
-Lots of detail & love put into depicting Amsterdam
-Still actively developed(it's been a while since the last update, but the discussion thread indicates the creator's still working on it)
That said, there's a lot of mechanics & events that serve to frustrate/baffle more than anything:
-What's the point of the 'guy touching your ass' event in the club? Why can't Lizzy just ignore him if her dignity is low enough?
-The water event at the bar wastes an hour by sending you to the dance floor right afterward
-Going home with girls doesn't reduce desire at all, even though the text makes it clear Lizzy got off from what happened
-What's the point of town events that kick you back home instead of returning you to the main town choices? It doesn't change anything, just adds a pointless click to keep exploring the town.
-Showers take way longer than they should, and it sometimes takes multiple hour-long showers to restore hygiene to 100.
-Each town area has a separate 'deck' of events that can happen, but there's not much difference between the Bijlmer area and the northern town area from what I've seen. And once you've unlocked key locations(the club, sex shop, and health club) and people(crack dealer, weed dealer), there's not much reason to wander town/the park at all except wasting time. It can actually be dangerous early on, since you risk Lizzy deciding to spend her rent money on a burger, museum, or bike rental.
I get the impression the creator wants Lizzy to act semi-independent of player control, but that just makes things less fun when it's for no apparent reason. By comparison, the events that trigger when certain stats/addictions reach critical values are more interesting, because there's a reason for them.
There's also some bugs that still need to be ironed out. The maid job in particular is very buggy - if your desire is too high(and it will be once you've hit the point that desire starts showing up at all) during some stages of the storyline, you get stuck masturbating & not getting paid when you go to work. But even if you go to work normally, you'll frequently lose money instead of gaining it, which I haven't seen happen in any other job. The game is also a huge memory hog in Chrome, to the point where it sometimes crashes the tab!
Where do I start? Great game, I love it. I'll do the pros and cons. Beware the spoilers ahead.
- Huge amount of content
- Great Characters
- Good porn
- Being a "good" girl has no rewards, or at least I haven't seen any
- Too many stats to manage
- No TF
- Very grindy (tries to keep to reality, but feels like it takes away from the fun)
- Ugly old men
Well done, I see that you've put lots of work into it. My main issue is mechanics of the game, i.e. stats. Too many to manage. Hygiene is OK, but I feel like having status like "sweaty", "covered in cum", "smelly" would be a lot better than having a flat stat in order to shower, still I think it's too deeply ingrained to be changed (personally, makes more sense). Morale and luck are useless in my opinion, as they require no work to keep up and lots of it to lower (random events should be random and only affected in outcome by your stats, like intellect, self-defense, fitness and so on).
Morale have not once have had an impact on my play-through. Needs more things that lower it and specific ways to raise it. For example, a psychologist (can be a manipulative perv), talking to people, going to the pub or a club, museum and so on would help raise it. Working, chores and bad events would lower it. Or it needs to be removed all together.
And now we come to the holy mess that is desire. Where do I start? Lizzy gets way too horny, way too quickly. You need to cap the desire gains to a very small amount, or streamline them to an overtime gain and events. Seriously, I went outside, came back into the house and got 40 desire for doing nothing and spending no in-game time. Also reaaaaaaaaaly need a button to make Lizzy masturbate, as going to work horny is annoying. Perhaps have her landlord catch her. Or when she does it in the shower she can be caught by one of the other residents.
Then we have work stats, experience and knowledge. I think combining them into a single stat would be a lot better. For example, Job Skill would be a combination of your knowledge and experience, and is raised by study and work itself. Will also make calculation for income and events easier since there is only one variable.
It feels like there is much needless micromanagement as well. How about going to kitchen and eating breakfast automatically once? Food doesn't seem to be as important for Lizzy as it perhaps should be. Hunger would be an interesting addition as well as cooking. But it could make game more cumbersome than necessary.
Next is some UI things. Needs better wording for the choices maybe? Sometimes it's hard to decide which to click based on the highlighted words as there is no clear indication of what is going to happen. But that's what save system is for so no biggie. Also would it be possible to have stat numbers in color on the right side? Then we have old men pictures. Would it be possible to have an option to disable them or have them replaced? Because nothing kills a mood faster for me than a picture of an old man.
Now onto the story aspects. I think it would be great to as you get richer to be able to get a much better apartment. Maybe even several different choices depending on how much money you are willing to pay. You can then add a bit of micromanagement like washing dishes, cooking, washing clothes and so on. Maybe even get an option to take a boy or a girl to your apartment and so on.
I only tried the cleaning job and photo shoots as library and flower shop is next on the list for me. Oh boy, Balans is a slippery slope. I haven't yet figured out all of the choices yet. Maybe on the next play-through or two. So far, I like it a lot. Photo shoot is too predictable I guess and while porn is good story is a bit boring to me. But I guess there isn't really much you can do there. Once, I am more aware of all the story choices I will review them a bit more. So far so good and you did mention more content for the story is coming so I am interested to see.
For those of you that are having trouble with the pictures, there is no bug. This might be obvious to some people who actually read the description, but it says: "03/01/2016 - V 0.7.2 Small update again to get rid of some small bugs and dead ends. Download this HTML version and the Data pack of V7"
So just click the second link for V7 and that is the download for the images
I mean makeup :(
What the hell?
its a good game but you need to short out the money in the modle job I start at a 100 erous then I go down to 7 whats going on? and why dose getting a cab cose EVERY erou you have?